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Writing task 1 , bar chart and pie chart

Writing task 1, bar chart and pie chart RVL0p

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of adults studying for various reasons and the pie chart compares the division of costs between individuals, taxpayers and employers. The data has been collected from a survey of adult education. Overall, most of the people decided to study because of the fact that they are interested in the subject and also to gain qualifications. Whereas, very few of them joined only with an intention to meet new people. Looking at the costs, maximum amount is considered to be covered by the individual and almost equally by the employer. With regards to the survey, 40% of the adults started studying because they are interested in the subject and 38% to gain qualifications. Almost equal proportion of people which is around 20%, joined with the idea of improving the prospects of promotion, helping them with their current job, or just the fact that they enjoy learning. However, very few people wanted to be able change jobs or meet new people with figures at 12% and 9% respectively. Focusing on, the costs, they believe that individual costs should be 40% of the total and employer needs to cover 35% of the total amount, which is a mere 5% less than that of the individual. In addition, 25% of the costs should be shared by the taxpayers.

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costs
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individuals
, taxpayers and employers. The data has been collected
 from a survey of adult education.

Overall
, most of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
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because of the fact that
 they are interested
 in the subject and also
 to gain qualifications. “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Whereas
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
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joined
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 with an intention to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :attain
meet
 new You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
. Looking at the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withworthoutlayfigureprice tagpricerate
costs
, maximum amount is considered
 to be covered
 by the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrespectivesingularpersonalsolelonespecific
individual
 and almost equally
 by the employer.

Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".In regard toWith regard toRegarding
With regards to
 the survey, 40% of the adults This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
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because
 they are interested
 in the subject and 38% to gain qualifications. Almost equal proportion of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 which is around 20%, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :consolidatedfused
joined
 with the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :thoughtconceptnotion
idea
 of improving the prospects of promotion, helping them with their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :contemporarymodern
current
 job, or This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 the fact that they enjoy learning. However
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
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people
 wanted to be able This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
 jobs or This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :attain
meet
 new You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 with figures at 12% and 9% respectively
.

Focusing on, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withworthoutlayfigureprice tagpricerate
costs
, they believe that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrespectivesingularpersonalsolelonespecific
individual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withworthoutlayfigureprice tagpricerate
costs
 should be 40% of the total and employer needs to cover 35% of the total amount, which is a mere 5% less than that of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrespectivesingularpersonalsolelonespecific
individual
. In addition
, 25% of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withworthoutlayfigureprice tagpricerate
costs
 should be shared
 by the taxpayers. 