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The bar graph illustrates how the proportion of female unemployment change in four nations of the UK between 2013 and 2014.

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The bar graph illustrates how the proportion of female unemployment change in four nations of the UK between 2013 and 2014. Overall, there was a small decline in the rates of female non-employment in England, Wales, and Northern Ireland, while Scotland witness a rise during the given period. In addition, the two countries, England and Scotland, are with the highest female unemployable rates in 2013 and 2014 respectively among the countries examined. It’s clearly shown that the UK region with the highest unemployment rate estimate was Britain at 6. 8% in 2013, after which it experienced a slight drop to 6. 5% in 2014. Similarly, 5, 4% of Wales females were unemployed in 2013, with a subsequent drop to 5. 0% in 2014, followed by the largest decrease in the unemployed rate was Northern Ireland at 1% which is the lowest jobless rate among these countries in the given time. In contrast, the figure for Scotland slightly increased from 6. 1% to 6. 7%, accounting for the highest figure in 2014 compared to other nations in the UK.
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decline in the
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of
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non-employment in England, Wales, and Northern Ireland, while Scotland witness a rise during the
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period.
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in 2013 and 2014
respectively
among the countries examined.

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clearly
shown that the UK region with the highest unemployment
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estimate was Britain at 6. 8% in 2013, after which it experienced a slight drop to 6. 5% in 2014.
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were unemployed
in 2013, with a subsequent drop to 5. 0% in 2014, followed by the largest decrease in the unemployed
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was Northern Ireland at 1% which is the lowest jobless
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among these countries in the
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given
time.

In contrast
, the figure for Scotland
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increased from 6. 1% to 6. 7%, accounting for the highest figure in 2014 compared to other nations in the UK.
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IELTS academic The bar graph illustrates how the proportion of female unemployment change in four nations of the UK between 2013 and 2014.

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