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Writing Task 1-1: Pie Chart showing the daily intake of sodium, fat, and added sugar

Writing Task 1-1: Pie Chart showing the daily intake of sodium, fat, and added sugar VQGJm
The three pie charts illustrate the intake proportion of various nutrients by an average person residing in USA. These nutrients, namely, sodium, saturated fat and added sugar are prevalent in modern meals and snacks but are also unhealthy if it is not consumed in moderation. Overall, the majority of sodium and saturated fat consumed by an average person in a day is when they have their dinner, whereas the bulk of sugar intake is when they have snacks. The percentage of saturated fat and sugar consumed during breakfast is the lowest at 16% whereas it accounts for precisely 14% of the daily sodium uptake. Lunch accounts for more than quarter of the daily uptake of sodium and saturated fat whereas it accounts for nearly one-fifths of daily uptake of sugar. Almost half of the daily sugar uptake is from snacks but on the contrary, only 14% and 21% of sodium and saturated fat is ingested via snacks respectively. An average person ingests an enormous 43% & 37% of the daily intake of sodium & saturated fat respectively but contributes to about a quarter of the daily sugar uptake.
The three pie charts illustrate the intake proportion of various nutrients by an average person residing
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in USA
. These nutrients,
namely
, sodium,
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saturated
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fat
and
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added
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sugar
are prevalent in modern meals and snacks
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but
are
also
unhealthy if it is not consumed in moderation.

Overall
, the majority of sodium and
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saturated
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fat
consumed by an average person in a day is when they have their dinner, whereas the bulk of
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sugar
intake is when they have snacks.

The percentage of
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saturated
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fat
and
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sugar
consumed during breakfast is the lowest at 16% whereas it accounts for
precisely
14% of the
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daily
sodium uptake. Lunch accounts for more than quarter of the
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daily
uptake of sodium and
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saturated
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fat
whereas it accounts for
nearly
one-fifths of
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daily
uptake of
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sugar
. Almost half of the
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daily
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sugar
uptake is from snacks
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but
on the contrary
,
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only
14% and 21% of sodium and
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saturated
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fat
is ingested
via snacks
respectively
. An average person ingests an enormous 43% & 37% of the
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daily
intake of sodium &
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saturated
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fat
respectively
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but
contributes to about a quarter of the
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daily
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sugar
uptake.
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IELTS academic Writing Task 1-1: Pie Chart showing the daily intake of sodium, fat, and added sugar

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
188 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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