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WRITE ABOUT YOURSELF FOR UNIVERSITY APPLICATION

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I am entering the most crucial phase in my life; a phase during which I need to make significant academic decisions that will have a bearing on my future life and career. After thorough introspection of my strengths and interests, I have concluded that a program that integrates Business studies is the most appropriate choice for me. “I am applying to the Business Administration in the Undergraduate program at Arizona State University because I believe my business Skills will blossom at your program as it is a place where I will be challenged to develop skills which will enable me to function in different roles with a solid foundation. ” My father and my late grandfather have been in the business of making “hardware tools” for the past 50 years, despite my young age, I used to visit his factory. When I started college, I started accompanying him to meet his clients. At times, to get more orders, I would also persuade them to give us bigger orders. All this is why I feel that I have found myself having the call for business, especially Marketing and Management ever since I remember. With recent advancements in communications technology, the business field has been revolutionized, with new opportunities and new potential pitfalls. With the globalization of business, the success or failure of international marketing campaigns is undeniably a powerful factor in the success or failure of modern companies. The Program at Arizona State University has great emphasis on management, analytics, economics, accountancy, marketing, and advertising. The techniques are accordingly advanced and well-established in the USA. I have been fortunate to have the opportunity to be guided by exceptional teachers who have shown firm belief in me and have supported me in participating in several inter-school and intra-school competitions such as debate, quiz, talent hunt, PowerPoint presentation, fashion show by the Rotaract club of Hassaram Rijhumal College, drawing, painting in Melange and Immaculata (events organized by 2 different colleges), elocution by the All for kids ( an institution that trains students for courses of Trinity College of London). I have been awarded at many of these competitions and have always performed to my best possible level. I have also been a member of the school Band and have contributed to it as an opening bass player since 6th grade. Throughout my School years, I have maintained a good academic record and have tried to gain as much knowledge as I could. I have scored well in my exams and I was in the top 10% of my class in my 10th board with 94. 8%. I have recently given my IELTS examination and have scored band 7 in it. During my first and second years of Junior College at Jai Hind College, I have realized my potential of being a true leader and organizing everything efficiently. I have organized many junior college events. I have displayed good team working skills and have enjoyed working with a large number of people. I like to socialize and learn from other people. I believe that learning is an unending process and there is no age or no reservation of any kind to learn something. I am motivated and passionate to work hard and enjoy the company of people around me. Apart from academics, I have always been good at sports since a very young age. I have represented my school at various Inter-school, Intra-school, and district levels at throwball and volleyball tournaments. I have received 10 medals and 7 trophies for my performance in these sports. I am also an excellent bass drum player and have been an opening player since my 6th grade for important and special school functions on Annual day, Republic day as well as Independence day. I have also participated in other sports activities such as swimming, carrom, discus, javelin, long jump, sprinting, table tennis, and badminton. I have always been passionate about sports and despite a rigorous curriculum I have tried to find time to indulge myself in different kinds of sports. Apart from academics and participation in sports I have also been a member of various clubs inside and outside my school - Gymkhana, Youth Wing of Rotary Club Bombay, Hanging Garden, and The Pransukhlal Mafatlal Swimming Bath & Boat Club Trust. I have also volunteered at an old age home at the Alexandra old age shelter, Tata Memorial Hospital for cancer patients, planted trees on world Environment days, and Terry Fox. I have also given various examinations such as Elementary and Intermediate, UNSW Global, Spelling bee, and also received a merit certificate in computer science and a distinction in geography and science. I have chosen to apply to your University’s Undergraduate program, specifically, for various reasons. The modern business world demands professionals with an understanding of different cultures, languages, and attitudes. In my view, pursuing a degree at ASU is the ideal way to broaden my horizons. I am eager to enter Arizona and take advantage of the extensive resources and learn from the renowned professors. Moreover, I am convinced that the Business Course at Arizona State University has a unique position and is perfect for my short and long-term goals. The customized curriculum, the flexibility of the program, and the focus groups would effectively improve my overall business skills as well as help me stand out in the current corporate world. Studying alongside inspired individuals from all across the globe through this Program, getting the perspective of the industrially relevant studies, and being mentored by the prominent faculty would ensure that my time spent at Arizona State is in continuation of my experience and studies rather than a detour. And while I aspire to gain my dreams by completing the Undergraduate Course from your esteemed university, I look forward to giving back in equal measure. I feel confident that my past education and the Business Program at Arizona State University will prepare me for the demands and challenges that I will inevitably face, and I am eager to begin studying at your university so that I may prove myself.
I am entering the most crucial phase in my life; a phase during which I need to
make
significant
academic
decisions that will have a bearing on my future life and career. After thorough introspection of my strengths and interests, I have concluded that a
program
that integrates
Business
studies is the most appropriate choice for me.

“I am applying to the
Business
Administration in the Undergraduate
program
at Arizona
State
University
because
I believe my
business
Skills
will blossom at your
program
as it is a place where I will
be challenged
to develop
skills
which will enable me to function in
different
roles with a solid foundation. ”

My father and my late grandfather have been in the
business
of making “hardware tools” for the past 50 years, despite my young
age
, I
used
to visit his factory. When I
started
college, I
started
accompanying him to
meet
his clients. At times, to
get
more orders, I would
also
persuade them to give us bigger orders. All this is why I feel that I have found myself having the call for
business
,
especially
Marketing and Management ever since I remember.

With recent advancements in communications technology, the
business
field has
been revolutionized
, with new opportunities and new potential pitfalls. With the globalization of
business
, the success or failure of international marketing campaigns is
undeniably
a powerful factor in the success or failure of modern
companies
. The
Program
at Arizona
State
University
has great emphasis on management, analytics, economics, accountancy, marketing, and advertising. The techniques are
accordingly
advanced and well-established in the USA.

I have been fortunate to have the opportunity to
be guided
by exceptional teachers who have shown firm belief in me and have supported me
in participating in
several inter-school and
intra-school
competitions such as debate, quiz, talent hunt, PowerPoint presentation, fashion
show
by the
Rotaract
club
of
Hassaram
Rijhumal
College, drawing, painting in
Melange
and
Immaculata
(
events
organized by 2
different
colleges), elocution by the All for kids
(
an institution that trains students for courses of Trinity College of London). I have
been awarded
at
many
of these competitions and have always performed to my best possible level.
I
have
also
been a member of the
school
Band and have contributed to it as an opening bass player since 6th grade.

Throughout my
School
years, I have maintained a
good
academic
record and have tried to gain as much knowledge as I could. I have scored well in my
exams and
I was in the top 10% of my
class
in my 10th board with 94. 8%. I have recently
given
my IELTS examination and have scored band 7 in it.

During my
first
and second years of Junior College at
Jai
Hind College, I have realized my potential of being a true leader and organizing everything
efficiently
. I have organized
many
junior college
events
. I have displayed
good
team working
skills
and have enjoyed working with
a large number of
people
.
I
like to socialize and learn from other
people
.
I
believe that learning is an unending process and there is no
age
or no reservation of any kind to learn something.
I
am motivated
and passionate to work
hard
and enjoy the
company
of
people
around me.

Apart from
academics
, I have always been
good
at
sports
since a
very
young
age
. I have represented my
school
at
various
Inter-school,
Intra-school
, and district levels at
throwball
and volleyball tournaments. I have received 10 medals and 7 trophies for my performance in these
sports
.
I
am
also
an excellent bass drum player and have been an opening player since my 6th grade for
important
and special
school
functions on Annual day, Republic day
as well
as
Independence day
.
I
have
also
participated in other
sports
activities such as swimming,
carrom
, discus, javelin, long jump, sprinting, table tennis, and badminton.
I
have always been passionate about
sports
and despite a rigorous curriculum I have tried to find time to indulge myself in
different
kinds of sports.

Apart from
academics
and participation in
sports
I have
also
been a member of
various
clubs
inside and outside my
school
-
Gymkhana, Youth Wing of Rotary
Club
Bombay, Hanging Garden, and The
Pransukhlal
Mafatlal
Swimming Bath & Boat
Club
Trust. I have
also
volunteered at an
old
age
home at the Alexandra
old
age
shelter, Tata Memorial Hospital for cancer patients, planted trees on world Environment days, and Terry Fox. I have
also
given
various
examinations such as Elementary and Intermediate,
UNSW
Global, Spelling bee, and
also
received a merit certificate in computer science and a distinction in geography and science.

I
have chosen to apply to your
University’s
Undergraduate
program
,
specifically
, for
various
reasons. The modern
business
world demands professionals with an understanding of
different
cultures, languages, and attitudes. In my view, pursuing a degree at ASU is the ideal way to broaden my horizons. I am eager to enter Arizona and take advantage of the extensive resources and learn from the renowned professors.

Moreover
, I
am convinced
that the
Business
Course at Arizona
State
University
has a unique position and is perfect for my short and long-term goals. The customized curriculum, the flexibility of the
program
, and the focus groups would
effectively
improve
my
overall
business
skills
as well
as
help
me stand out in the
current
corporate world. Studying alongside inspired individuals from all across the globe through this
Program
, getting the perspective of the
industrially
relevant studies, and
being mentored
by the prominent faculty would ensure that my time spent at Arizona
State
is in continuation of my experience and studies
rather
than a detour. And while I aspire to gain my dreams by completing the Undergraduate Course from your esteemed
university
, I look forward to giving back in equal measure. I feel confident that my past education and the
Business
Program
at Arizona
State
University
will prepare me for the demands and challenges that I will
inevitably
face, and I am eager to
begin
studying at your
university
so
that I may prove myself.
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