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The two maps represent the inner structures of a cinema as a comparison between 1980 and the present.

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The two maps represent the inner structures of a cinema as a comparison between 1980 and the present. In general, by the time, it is noticeable that there are some expansions as the number of screen rooms has increased significantly and some service areas were created. In contrast, such an area as the car park has been removed for other purposes. In the past, the audience only had two selections of movie rooms, either room number 1 or number 2. With the small number of movie screening areas, the service facilities were limited as there was only one place for drinks beside the ticket distribution and one restroom. However, nowadays, the movie theatre can offer five chambers, which shows three new rooms have been built. In addition, the places of each section have been changed as the place for drinks before is now selling DVDs. There is also a relaxing room as well. The car park is completely swept away in order to add spaces for other rooms.

The two maps represent the inner structures of a cinema as a comparison between 1980 and the present.

In general
, by the time, it is noticeable that there are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 expansions as the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 of screen You use this word too often, consider replacing it withplacearea
rooms
 has increased significantly
 and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 service areas were created
. In contrast
, such an area as the car park has been removed
 for other purposes.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
 the past, the audience This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 had two selections of movie You use this word too often, consider replacing it withplacearea
rooms
, either You use this word too often, consider replacing it withplacearea
room
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 1 or You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 2. With the This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 of movie screening areas, the service facilities were limited
 as there was This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 one place for drinks beside the ticket distribution and one restroom.

However
, nowadays, the movie Possible spelling mistake. 'theatre' is British English.theater
theatre
 can offer five chambers, which This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
shows
 three new You use this word too often, consider replacing it withplacearea
rooms
 have been built
. In addition
, the places of each section have been This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteredadjusted
changed
 as the place for drinks This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
 selling DVDs. There is also
 a relaxing You use this word too often, consider replacing it withplacearea
room
as well
. The car park is completely swept away in order to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accrue
add
 spaces for other You use this word too often, consider replacing it withplacearea
rooms
. 