Search
Tools
Listening
Reading
1. Academic
2. General
Writing
1. IELTSWriting Checker
2. IELTS Writing Samples
Speaking

Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.

write about the money spent by British parents on their children’s sports

write about the money spent by British parents on their children’s sports BJLa5

The line graphs given illustrate the monthly expenditure in pounds by parents from Britain for their children's sportings from 2008 to 2014, and the children's number in millions who took part in football, athletics and swimming over the same period. Overall, it is clear that the average monthly outlays had grown consistently. Football was the most popular game during that time period. In the terms of participation, although more than 7. 5 million children played football in 2008, at the end of the period slightly more, with 7. 7 million, participated in the same event. Moreover, this number was far greater than the other two sporting events. Athletics was the least populous game in 2008, with less than one million participants, while swimming was the second popular game in the beginning, with near 2. 2 million participants, but remained at the last position by 2014 (3. 5 million). On the other hand, average monthly spending was 20 pounds in 2008, ended up with more than 32 pounds in the year 2014.

The line graphs This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 illustrate the monthly expenditure in pounds by parents from Britain for their children's Possible spelling mistake found.sporting
sportings
 from 2008 to 2014, and the children's number in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
millions
 who This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :participated
took part
 in football, athletics and swimming over the same period.

Overall
, it is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :apparent
clear
 that the average monthly outlays had grown consistently
. Football was the most popular game during that time period.

In the terms of participation, although more than 7. 5 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
 children played football in 2008, at the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
 of the period slightly
 more, with 7. 7 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
, participated in the same This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :occasionhappening
event
. Moreover
, this number was far greater than the other two sporting This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :occasionshappenings
events
. Athletics was the least populous game in 2008, with less than one You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
 participants, while swimming was the second popular game in the beginning, with near 2. 2 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
 participants, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 remained at the last position by 2014 (3. 5 million).

On the other hand
, average monthly spending was Writing for an international audience? Consider adding the metric equivalent.20 pounds (ca. 9 kg)20 pounds (9.07 kg)20 pounds (ca. 9 kilogram)20 pounds (9.07 kilogram)20 pounds (0.01 t)20 pounds (0.01 ton)
20 pounds
 in 2008, ended up with more than Writing for an international audience? Consider adding the metric equivalent.32 pounds (ca. 15 kg)32 pounds (14.51 kg)32 pounds (ca. 15 kilogram)32 pounds (14.51 kilogram)32 pounds (0.01 t)32 pounds (0.01 ton)
32 pounds
 in the year 2014. 