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the number of local and international students' admission in Australian universities over a time period of 10 years.

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The given graphs illustrate the number of local and international students' admission to Australian universities over a time period of 10 years. overall, it is clear that although total enrolments of international students rose continuously, the number of local students remained constant after a certain period of time. However, there was no significant difference between enrolled commencing pupils. In terms of overseas students, the total number increased from 20000 in the year 2001 to more than 80000 in the year 2010, while in 2001, commencing students were around 12000, they were just above 40000 in 2010, and this figure was almost half as compared to whole strength. In the case of local students, in 2001, they were 400, 000 in total, and reached more than 600, 000, but gained plateau stage afterwards. However, the number of commencing students were far less than the total number, and it was below 200, 000 in 2001, which grown just up to slightly more than 200, 000.
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of local and international students' admission to Australian universities over a time period of 10 years.

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of local
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remained constant after a certain period of time.
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increased from 20000 in the year 2001 to more than 80000 in the year 2010, while in 2001, commencing
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were around 12000, they were
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above 40000 in 2010, and this figure was almost half as compared to whole strength.

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, in 2001, they were 400, 000 in
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, and reached more than 600, 000,
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gained plateau stage afterwards.
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of commencing
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were far less than the
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, and it was below 200, 000 in 2001, which grown
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more than 200, 000.
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IELTS academic the number of local and international students' admission in Australian universities over a time period of 10 years.

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