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Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graphs below.

The first graph shows the number of deaths in Someland 1990 caused by some of the dangerous diseases, like AIDS, and Malaria. . Etc. As we can see, the disease that have the most of deaths is the TB with the average of 1. 8 million deaths, and we find some similarities in the average of deaths concerning the Tropical diseases, Diarrhea, and Malaria, between 0. 25 to 0. 5 million deaths. Then there is AIDS with less than 0. 25 million of deaths, and finally the smallest amount of deaths caused by Leprosy with the average of 0. 1 million deaths. The second graph shows the medical research funding in Someland 1990. As it is shown in the graph, most of the medical research funding are for the AIDS diseases with the average of 180 millions. Also there is the similarity in the average of funding between the Leprosy and the Tropical diseases, which is about 80 millions. Then we find the Malaria and Diarrhea diseases with the average between 50 and 60 millions. At last there is the TB which is less then 25 millions approximately. Summary: The two graphs shows the deadliest diseases that it is being deal with in Someland 1990. We can say that the deadliest disease in Someland is TB, which is very dangerous illness that attack the lungs of the person and leads to his death after while of time, the other diseases are also deadly but not as much as the TB illness, and we can say that the chances of healing from it are less than the others, that's why the funding of the medical research are less concerning this disease. Also there is the AIDS, and as we can see that there not a lot of deaths compared with the TB illness, but the chances to live with this disease are quite high compared to the others, that's why the medical research funding are very high concerning AIDS. The other diseases are between these two illnesses ( TB, AIDS), which means that they are quite normal if we take into consideration the global medical research.
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the number of deaths in Someland 1990 caused by
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some
of the
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dangerous


diseases, like
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AIDS
, and Malaria. . Etc.

As we can
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see
, the
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disease
that have the most of deaths is the TB with the
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average
of 1. 8
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million
deaths,

and we find
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some
similarities in the
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average
of deaths concerning the Tropical
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diseases
, Diarrhea, and

Malaria, between 0. 25 to 0. 5
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million
deaths. Then there is
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AIDS
with
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less
than 0. 25
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million
of deaths, and

finally
the smallest amount of deaths caused by Leprosy with the
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average
of 0. 1
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million
deaths.

The second
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shows
the
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medical
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research
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funding
in Someland 1990.

As it
is shown
in the
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graph
, most of the
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medical
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research
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funding
are for the
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AIDS
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diseases
with the

average of 180
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millions
.
Also
there is the similarity in the
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average
of
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funding
between the Leprosy and

the Tropical
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diseases
, which is about 80
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millions
. Then we find the Malaria and Diarrhea
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diseases
with

the
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between 50 and 60
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millions
. At last there is the TB which is
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less
then 25 millions

approximately.

Summary:

The two
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graphs
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the deadliest
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diseases
that it is being deal with in Someland 1990. We can say

that the deadliest
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disease
in Someland is TB, which is
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very
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dangerous
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illness
that attack the lungs of the

person and leads to his death after while of time, the
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other
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diseases
are
also
deadly
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but
not as much as

the TB
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illness
, and we can say that the chances of healing from it are
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less
than the others, that's why the

funding of the
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medical
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research
are
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less
concerning this
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disease
.
Also
there is the
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AIDS
, and as we can

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see
that there not
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a lot of
deaths compared with the TB
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illness
,
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the chances to
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live
with this disease

are quite high compared to the others, that's why the
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medical
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research
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funding
are
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very
high concerning

AIDS. The
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other
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diseases
are between these two
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illnesses
( TB,
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AIDS)
, which means that they are quite

normal if we take into consideration the global
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medical
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research
.

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