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When you look at the blue line which belongs to smartphone, you realize that people used smartphone under 40% in 2010 and we can see it is going up to 61% in 2015, then it also went up to near 80% in 2020, finally we have an increase to around 89%.

When you look at the blue line which belongs to smartphone, you realize that people used smartphone under 40% in 2010 and we can see it is going up to 61% in 2015, then it also went up to near 80% in 2020, finally we have an increase to around 89%. For the orange line which is belonged to laptop we can see it was popular among people in 2010 with 61% and an increase up to 70% in 2015 but it has a fall to under 70% in 2020 and finally it has a decrease to under 60% in 2025, so it means that people prefer to use smartphone more than laptop. The purple line that belongs to tablet, shows it was not common in 2010 and years before as much as years 2015 as it was 21% in 2010 and then it goes up to more than 50%. between years 2015 and 2020 we have a soft increase which is less than 10%. At the end in 2025 we have a fall from 60% to 55%. The last line that is green and we want to talk about, is belonged to smartwatch. It was not popular among people at all in 2010 and 2015 as it increased from 0% to 5%. However, we have a rise up to more than 20% in 2020 and at the end we can see it goes up more than 20% again. After 15 years, percentage of people who owns smartphone is 40%. To sum up, I can realize that people who buy smartphone and smartwatch are more than people who buy laptop and tablet. Maybe it is because smart gadgets are not as heavy as laptop and tablet

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