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The graph below shows how people in United Kingdom spend their income.

The graph below shows how people in United Kingdom spend their income. e3WPx
The rendered linear graph depicts the information about the people in the country of United Kingdom spend their earning on food, education and entertainment. It is clearly seen that, initially, the maximum percentage of poorest people use their money on food which is a significant majority percentage. Moreover, there are difference of 10% in the poorest people spend their income on entertainment and education with the percentage of 10% and 20%. In addition, the middle income masse expenditure their money on education and entertainment are approximately same with the percentage of nearly a third and roughly one quarter. Probing ahead, the middle income dwellerso expenses their earning on food, education and entertainment are one third, almost a quarter and a small minority proportion of people respectively. Whereas, the richest use their income on food gradually decrease with 20% but entertainment dramatically increase with nearly a third % and richest person spend their earning on education which is a small minority %. From overall analysis, there are various fluctuations in the proportion of poorest people, middle income individual and richest person in the United Kingdom.
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education
with the
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education
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individual and richest person in the United Kingdom.
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