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The information about the number of students in the age group of 14 to 16 years learning a modern international language in an English speaking nation and the three most popular foreign languages is depicted by the rendered vertical bar graphs.

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The information about the number of students in the age group of 14 to 16 years learning a modern international language in an English speaking nation and the three most popular foreign languages is depicted by the rendered vertical bar graphs. The data has been calibrated in numbers. Overall, it is apparent from the graph that in both periods more girls were interested in learning a new language as opposed to boys. Moreover, French was the most popular language among the youth, followed by German, whereas the least number of students were interested in Spanish. With regards to the number of students who studied a foreign language, in 1984, approximately 48% of girls were utilizing their time in learning a foreign language, while for the male students it was 30%. After 23 years, there was a slight fall in the figures for both girls and boys, and it reached 40% for females, while for boys it fell just over 20%, but in both the periods there were more girls involved in learning as compared to boys. On the other hand, in the beginning, French was the most popular language for learning among students, and it accounted for 50%, which was followed by German with 20%, and with only 5% of students, German was the language in which students were least interested. In 2007, there was a drastic decline in the percentage of students learning French and it dropped at about 25%, while for the German learners there was a little fall, and it reached just over 10%. In the case of Spanish learners, there was a slight increase in number and by the end of the period, it reached 10%.
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IELTS academic The information about the number of students in the age group of 14 to 16 years learning a modern international language in an English speaking nation and the three most popular foreign languages is depicted by the rendered vertical bar graphs.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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