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The line graph provides information about  the  global water use  for three different purposes whereas the table gives data about the consumption of water in Brazil and Democratic Republic of congo. overall, it is readily apparent from the graph that agriculture sector utilized more water than other two sectors. water consumption per person is higher in brazil than congo. In the initial year, agriculture field  used around 500km3 of water then it gradually increased over the next years and reached its highest level of 3000km in 2000. In contrast, the figures for industrial and domestic use remained almost constant until 1940. while in the following years industrial sector has illustrated a moderate increase  and become 100km3 by 2000, whereas the latter group shows only marginal raise and obtained a use of approximately 200km in the final year. From the table it is clear that brazil have higher population and water use per person and for irrigated land than democratic republic of  congo.
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the
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global
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use
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for three
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purposes whereas the table gives data about the consumption of
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in Brazil and Democratic Republic of
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congo
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overall
, it is
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apparent from the graph that agriculture sector utilized more
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water
than other two sectors.
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water
consumption per person is higher in
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brazil
than
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. In the initial year, agriculture field
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used
around 500km3 of
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then it
gradually
increased over the
next
years and reached its highest level of
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3000km
in 2000.
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, the figures for industrial and domestic
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use
remained almost constant until 1940.
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while
in the following years industrial sector has illustrated a moderate increase
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and become 100km3 by 2000, whereas the latter group
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shows
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only
marginal raise and obtained a
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of approximately
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200km
in the final year. From the table it is
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clear
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that brazil have
higher population and
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per person and for irrigated land than democratic republic of
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congo
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