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Two Planning Maps

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Figure provided above reveals the master plan of a town, which presents some major facilities such as new-built shopping centers, industrial and residential zone, business centre and also main transportation routes connecting to other nearby towns. Located in residential zone, shopping center A is going to be built on central business district where railway line is placed on the south and main road is on the north. Main road links three neighboring towns - distanced 12 km, 25 km and 15 km to the next three town, respectively - and separates two industrial zones which is positioned on the west and the east. Conversely, instead of on residential zone, shopping center B will be erected on rural zone - countryside which is miles from shopping center A. shopping center B also will be built next to in front of railway line on the south and next to main road on the opposite side. According to the figure, Residential zone has the vastest area built in town, which central business district is located on the center of it.
Figure provided above reveals the master plan of a town, which presents
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some
major facilities such as

new-built
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shopping
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centers
, industrial and
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residential
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zone
, business
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centre
and
also
main

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transportation
routes connecting to other nearby towns.

Located in
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residential
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zone
,
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shopping
center A is going to
be built
on central business district where

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railway
line
is placed
on the south and main road is on the north. Main road links three
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neighboring


towns
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distanced 12 km, 25 km and 15 km to the
next
three town,
respectively
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and separates two

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industrial
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zones
which
is positioned
on the west and the east.

Conversely
,
instead
of on
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residential
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zone
,
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shopping
center B will
be erected
on rural
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zone
-

countryside which is miles from
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shopping
center A.
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shopping
center B
also
will
be built
next
to in front

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of
railway line on the south and
next
to main road on the opposite side.

According to the figure,
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Residential
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zone
has the vastest area built in town, which central business

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district
is located
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on the center
of it.
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IELTS academic Two Planning Maps

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177 words
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