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The maps show the development of the island

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The diagram shows changes introduced to improve the construction of some tourist facilities on the island. First of all, the planners propose to install interconnected path network. Vehicle track will center around reception. Building a complex of apartment houses is also in plan. Tne cluster of condos will be set up next to the bay. This will transform the appearance of the island and attract more tourists. In addition to vehicle track footpaths connecting apartment houses with the beach are supposed to facilitate life of the guests. To summarize, under these proposals, the needs of tourists will be served better and a flow of guests will increase.
The diagram
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shows
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changes
introduced to
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improve
the construction of
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some
tourist facilities on the island.

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First of all
, the planners propose to install interconnected path network. Vehicle
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track
will center around reception. Building a complex of apartment
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houses
is
also
in plan.
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Tne
cluster of condos will
be set
up
next
to the bay. This will transform the appearance of the island and attract more tourists.

In addition
to vehicle
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track
footpaths connecting apartment
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houses
with the beach
are supposed
to facilitate life of the guests.

To summarize
, under these proposals, the needs of tourists will
be served
better and a flow of guests will increase.

IELTS academic The maps show the development of the island

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
107 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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