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The Process of Milk Production

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The flow chart illustrates the process of milk production. Overall, all process can be divided into two stages, in-farm and in-factory production. While in-farm production does not require advanced technology, in contrast, in-factory production use technologically more developed equipment. In first stage, after cows are free-ranged fed by grass, in next stage they are milked twice a day by milking machine. The milking machine is connected by pipes from the farm to refrigeration storage tanks. Following step is transport, by lorry, of raw milk to factory. While milk is delivered and stored in the factory, next stage is its production in tanks in dairy production. Milk, after its dairy process, is either turned into cheese, cream and butter, or used as a milk; being packed and labeled, other dairy products are ready to be sold. In the next stage, milk is pasteurised and packed into plastic bottles and as well as other dairy products, ready to be sold in supermarkets and shops.
The flow chart illustrates the process of
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milk
production.

Overall
, all process can
be divided
into two
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stages
, in-farm and in-factory
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production
. While in-farm
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production
does not require advanced technology,
in contrast
, in-factory
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production
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use
technologically
more developed equipment.

In
first
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stage
, after cows are free-ranged fed by grass, in
next
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stage
they
are milked
twice a day by milking machine. The milking machine
is connected
by pipes from the farm to refrigeration storage tanks. Following step is transport, by lorry, of raw
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milk
to factory.

While
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milk
is delivered
and stored in the factory,
next
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stage
is its
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production
in tanks in
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dairy
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production
.
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Milk
, after its
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dairy
process, is either turned into cheese, cream and butter, or
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used
as a
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milk
;
being packed
and labeled, other
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dairy
products are ready to
be sold
. In the
next
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stage
,
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milk
is
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pasteurised
and packed into plastic bottles and
as well
as other
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dairy
products, ready to
be sold
in supermarkets and shops.
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IELTS academic The Process of Milk Production

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
162 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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