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two maps show sunny island before and after commercialisation, Summarise the information by selectinf the main features and making comparisons where relevant

two maps show sunny island before and after commercialisation, 8x88P
The given map reveals the dramatic changes in a small island that had been developed to add a number of facilities, especially for the visiting tourists Overall, with the construction of different types of facilities, the island has been transformed into a tourist attraction where people can stay, eat, play and easily get around. The island is about 250 meters long. Before development started, it only had a beach along its western coast and some stands of palms near its eastern and western ends. These natural features remain unchanged after development However, two accommodation areas with footpaths have been built in the center and west of the island respectively. The footpaths in the western accommodation area have been extended westward to the beach where people can now go swimming Between the two accommodation areas is reception, which is surrounded by a vehicle track. This track connects with the footpaths west of it, and extends northward to a new restaurant and southward to a new pier. The eastern part of the island remains same
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map reveals the dramatic
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changes
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small
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island
that had
been developed
to
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add
a number of facilities,
especially
for the visiting tourists

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, with the construction of
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different
types of facilities, the
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island
has
been transformed
into a tourist attraction where
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people
can stay, eat, play and
easily
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get
around.

The
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island
is about 250 meters long.
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Before
development
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started
, it
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only
had a beach along its western coast and
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some
stands of palms near its eastern and western ends. These natural features remain unchanged after development
However
, two accommodation areas with footpaths have
been built
in the center and west of the
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island
respectively
. The footpaths in the western accommodation area have
been extended
westward to the beach where
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people
can
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now
go swimming Between the two accommodation areas is reception, which
is surrounded
by a vehicle
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track
. This
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track
connects with the footpaths west of it, and extends northward to a new restaurant and southward to a new pier. The eastern part of the
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island
remains
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same
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IELTS academic two maps show sunny island before and after commercialisation,

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
172 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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