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Two maps below shows the changes in town of Denham between the years 1986 and 2016

Two maps below shows the changes in town of Denham between the years 1986 and 2016 6l0w3
The presented maps compare the variations in Denham from 1986 to 2016. Overall, the farmlands were dismantled and replaced by apartment complex and a new way. Furthermore, the Large House with a garden was expanded. In detail, Firstly, shops, farmlands and some trees were converted by lots of homes. Secondly, Primary school was enlarged while Post office was remained as the same during 30 years. Looking at the whole, although Denham was an village in 1986, however it became a city as a result of changes.
The presented maps compare the variations in
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Denham
from 1986 to 2016.

Overall
, the farmlands
were dismantled
and replaced by apartment complex and a new way.
Furthermore
, the Large
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
House
with a garden
was expanded
.

In detail,
Firstly
, shops, farmlands and
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some
trees
were converted
by lots of homes.
Secondly
, Primary school
was enlarged
while Post office
was remained
as the same during 30 years. Looking at the whole, although
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Denham
was
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an
village in 1986,
however
it became a city
as a result
of
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changes
.
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IELTS academic Two maps below shows the changes in town of Denham between the years 1986 and 2016

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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