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Two maps below shows the changes in town of Denham between the years 1986 and 2016

Two maps below shows the changes in town of Denham between the years 1986 and 2016 6l0w3

The presented maps compare the variations in Denham from 1986 to 2016. Overall, the farmlands were dismantled and replaced by apartment complex and a new way. Furthermore, the Large House with a garden was expanded. In detail, Firstly, shops, farmlands and some trees were converted by lots of homes. Secondly, Primary school was enlarged while Post office was remained as the same during 30 years. Looking at the whole, although Denham was an village in 1986, however it became a city as a result of changes.

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 from 1986 to 2016.

Overall
, the farmlands were dismantled
 and replaced by apartment complex and a new way. Furthermore
, the Large This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
House
 with a garden was expanded
.

In detail, Firstly
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some
 trees were converted
 by lots of homes. Secondly
, Primary school was enlarged
 while Post office was remained
 as the same during 30 years. Looking at the whole, although Possible spelling mistake found.Den hamDunham
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an
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. 

IELTS academic Two maps below shows the changes in town of Denham between the years 1986 and 2016

Academic

American English

3 paragraphs

86 words

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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Lexical Resource: 6.0

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Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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