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Provided the static maps beneath highligt data about inside and outside of the museum in the years 1957 and 2007.

Provided the static maps beneath highligt data about inside and outside of the museum in the years 1957 and 2007. ELDBD
Provided the static maps beneath highligt data about inside and outside of the museum in the years 1957 and 2007. All in all, there has been big changes. The museum's building has been enlarged, as a result of chopping down the trees. And there added a new car park. In the first stage, the trees in the north of the museum's area cut, and then education centre and special exhibition rooms have been erected. The trees in the west corner of the map cut and also fir trees near to the road chopped down, after that alternatively new museum shop were constructed. Next, big changes were inside of the museum building, instead of enterance hall, there built reception room, also museum store room destroyed, in lieu of new cafe had been built. In the following stage, local history room replaced, and then it located in the middle of the bulding. A major development is that footpath in the south of the museum interance was demolished, and small woodland in the left of the privious footpath turned into car park.
Provided the static maps beneath
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highligt
data about inside and
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outside of
the
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museum
in the years 1957 and 2007.

All in all, there has been
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big
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changes
. The museum's building has
been enlarged
,
as a result
of chopping down the
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trees
. And there
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added
a new car park.

In the
first
stage, the
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trees
in the north of the museum's area
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cut
, and then education
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centre
and special exhibition
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rooms
have
been erected
. The
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trees
in the west corner of the map
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cut
and
also
fir
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trees
near to the road chopped down, after that
alternatively
new
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museum
shop
were constructed
.

Next
,
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big
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changes
were
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inside of
the
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museum
building,
instead
of
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enterance
hall, there built reception
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room
,
also
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museum
store
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room
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destroyed
, in lieu of new
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cafe
had
been built
.

In the following stage, local history
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room
replaced, and then it located in the middle of the
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bulding
. A major development is that footpath in the south of the
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museum
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interance
was demolished
, and
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small
woodland in the
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left
of the
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privious
footpath turned into car park.
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IELTS academic Provided the static maps beneath highligt data about inside and outside of the museum in the years 1957 and 2007.

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