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two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. o2PV
The top map gives information on the plan for a city hospital's access in 2007, and the second one demonstrates the changes in accessibility in three years. This report will highlight the similarities and differences. Overall, access to a hospital is provided by bus and cars on two maps. Noticeable newly planned changes on the transport. First of all, it is clearly seen that in 2007, there was a mere car park, which is using for public and staff, in 2010 designers divided parking area into two different categories for staff and public. While the personnel working in the hospital was using the old parking place, they added a new park place for the only public using on the left side of the hospital. They changed the other way on used transportation by removing six bus stops and create the bus station area. On the other hand, there are two new roundabouts, designers placed the first one on the south of the hospital between Ring and Hospital road and located the second one on the junction of City and Hospital road.
The top map gives information on the plan for a city hospital's access in 2007, and the second one demonstrates the
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changes
in accessibility in three years. This report will highlight the similarities and differences.

Overall
, access to a
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hospital
is provided
by bus and cars on two maps. Noticeable
newly
planned
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changes
on the transport.

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First of all
, it is
clearly
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seen
that in 2007, there was a mere car park, which is using for public and staff, in 2010 designers divided parking area into two
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different
categories for staff and public. While the personnel working in the
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hospital
was using the
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old
parking place, they
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added
a new park place for the
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only
public using on the
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left
side of the
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hospital
. They
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changed
the other way on
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used
transportation by removing six bus
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stops
and create the bus station area.

On the other hand
, there are two new roundabouts, designers placed the
first
one on the south of the
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hospital
between Ring and
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Hospital
road and located the second one on the junction of City and
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Hospital
road.
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IELTS academic two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

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4 paragraphs
181 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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