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Travelers visited Malaysia and Dubai

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The line graph compares the number of travelers who visited Malaysia and Dubai from 1995 to 2003. Overall, more tourists went to visit Malaysia from 1995 to 2000, but afterward, Dubai got more visitors. Getting back to the details, 100 thousand tourists visited Malaysia in 1995 and it was more than double than the number of tourists in Dubai at the same time. Next year, visitors to Malaysia increases while declined in Dubai. Afterward, the number of tourists in Malaysia and Dubai rapidly increased and in 1998, 200 thousand people went to Malaysia compared to over 150 thousand in Dubai. Interestingly, holidaymakers’ number to both these places became identical and reached to over a quarter million in 2000. Next year, both countries witnessed a hike in their tourists’ number which stood at around 325 thousand. A reverse trend during the next few years followed with more tourists in Dubai than in Malaysia. In 2002 Dubai got more trippers and this trend continued in the next year when 0. 4 million vacationers visited Dubai compared to less than 0. 25 million in Malaysia.
The line graph compares the
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of travelers who visited Malaysia and Dubai from 1995 to 2003.
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, more
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tourists
went to visit Malaysia from 1995 to 2000,
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afterward, Dubai
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more visitors.

Getting back to the
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, 100 thousand
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tourists
visited Malaysia in 1995 and it was more than double than the
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of
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tourists
in Dubai at the same time.
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Next
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year
, visitors to Malaysia increases while declined in Dubai. Afterward, the
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of
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tourists
in Malaysia and Dubai
rapidly
increased and in 1998, 200 thousand
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people
went to Malaysia compared to over 150 thousand in Dubai.
Interestingly
, holidaymakers’
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to both these places became identical and reached to over a quarter million in 2000.
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Next
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year
, both countries witnessed a hike in their
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tourists’
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number
which stood at around 325 thousand. A reverse trend during the
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few years followed with more
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tourists
in Dubai than in Malaysia. In 2002 Dubai
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got
more trippers and this trend continued in the
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next
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when 0. 4 million vacationers visited Dubai compared to less than 0. 25 million in Malaysia.
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IELTS academic Travelers visited Malaysia and Dubai

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  American English
2 paragraphs
182 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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