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Tourism in Australia and Germany during 1960 to 2010

Tourism in Australia and Germany during 1960 to 2010 2n9j

The chart show how tourism in Australia and Germany changed during1960 - 2010 period (over 50 years). In Australia, Europe showed the highest tourist percentage which was more than a half of the all other regions. But it was totally changed by 2010 which obtained only 10 percent of the total tourism. Asia showed the maximum percentage of tourism which was 63% of the total tourism while it represented the lowest percentage in 1960. There was not much difference in Britain during over the 50 years which was only 5% decline than 1960. Migration from USA also declined from 5% than 50 years back. In Germany the highest percentage showed from Europe as same as Australia and it was slightly declined by 2010. But the leading tourism country is still Europe. In 1960 Asia showed only 10 percentage while it had been increased up to 25% by 2010. USA also showed a slight increase in tourism. But Britain was declined almost 15% during the 50 years period. When considering both Australia and Germany, Europe showed the highest amount in 1960 and Australia showed 8% percentage than Germany. The lowest amount was reported in Asia which was 10% for both countries in 1960. But after 5p years it was gradually increased in Australia and considerable increase in Germany. In 2010 Europe percentage is almost 30% high in Germany than Australia and nearly 15% less than it for Britain.

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