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The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different countries in the U.S. state of Oregon

The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different countries in the U. S. state of Oregon k2kd
The population change in the state of Oregon such as Columbia, Yamhill, and Washington from 1940 to 2000 is depicted in the line graph. Overall, the number of population in the Columbia, Yamhiil, and Washington were an upward trend. Moreover, in Washington had the highest population over the period given. Between 1940 to 1970, there was an increase in the number of population of Washington from 75 to 120. However, in the Columbia stood at 30, and it showed a steady rise to 45, likewise, the population in the early period was same with Columbia, then that increasing to 30, and it became the lowest level of population. In the next 30 years, the population in the Washington experienced a dramatic grow to peak approximately 240, and it was being the highest population. While over 75 of population was Yamhill in the end of period, also those of Columbia saw an upward rate to 60 thousand.
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in the state of Oregon such as Columbia,
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Yamhill
, and Washington from 1940 to 2000
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in the line graph.

Overall
, the number of
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population
in the Columbia,
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Yamhiil
, and Washington were an upward trend.
Moreover
, in Washington had the highest
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over the period
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Between 1940 to 1970
, there was an increase in the number of
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of Washington from 75 to 120.
However
, in the Columbia stood at 30, and it
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showed
a steady rise to 45,
likewise
, the
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in the early period was same with Columbia, then that increasing to 30, and it became the lowest level of population.

In the
next
30 years, the
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population
in the Washington experienced a dramatic grow to peak approximately 240, and it was being the highest
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population
. While over 75 of
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was
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Yamhill
in the
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end
of period,
also
those of Columbia
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saw
an upward rate to 60 thousand.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different countries in the U. S. state of Oregon

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