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total amount of Olympic gold, silver, and bronze medals won by twelve various nations

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The given bar graph illustrates the total amount of Olympic gold, silver, and bronze medals won by twelve various nations. A cursory glance at the graph is enough to make it clear that the USA had by far the most number medals. Overall, the USA won the most medals, while Japan had the fewest medals among all the given countries. As is presented in the chart, the USA won almost 2300 medals with 1000 gold medals, 800 silver medals, and 500 bronze medals in the total number of Olympic medals. The second country following the USA was the Soviet Union with about 1000 medals in total. The United Kingdom received almost 700 medals with won an equal number in the three types of medals. France ranked 4th among medal-winning countries. Except for these four countries, other 8 countries had got between almost 300 and 500 medals. For instance, Japan, which was the least medal winner country, won approximately 300 medals.
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won by twelve various nations. A cursory glance at the graph is
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that the USA had by far the
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, while Japan had the fewest
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among all the
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with 1000 gold
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, 800 silver
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, and 500 bronze
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in the total number of Olympic
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. The second
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following the USA was the Soviet Union with about 1000
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in total. The United Kingdom received almost 700
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with won an equal number in the three types of
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. France ranked 4th among medal-winning
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, other 8
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between almost 300 and 500
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, won approximately 300
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IELTS academic total amount of Olympic gold, silver, and bronze medals won by twelve various nations

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