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Top medal winners of all time and medal won in all Olympics

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The provided line graph indicates a number of selected countries having achieved the most medals in all Olympics. In contrast, the presented table depicts 5 successful athletes in swimming, Gymnastics, and Biathlon based on their origins. A glance at the data reveals that the USA and then USSR having stood at the first rank compare to Italy with fewer rewards. The USA, being the first medal leader with up to 2500 ones, is where the winner of swimming is from. In addition, USSR has 3 top athletes in Gymnastics moreover to its second rank in total medal numbers up to 1000 ones. Norway is also known for its top winner in Biathlon. but the proportion of Italy in Olympic medals is much fewer than other shown countries in the graph. to sum up, all the shown areas have gained rewards but the USA and USSR have the highest rank specially in swimming and Gymnastics
The provided line graph indicates a number of selected countries having achieved the most
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medals
in all Olympics.
In contrast
, the presented table depicts 5 successful athletes in swimming, Gymnastics, and Biathlon based on their origins. A glance at the data reveals that the USA and then USSR having stood at the
first
rank compare to Italy with fewer rewards. The USA, being the
first
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medal
leader with up to 2500 ones, is where the winner of swimming is from.
In addition
, USSR has 3 top athletes in Gymnastics
moreover
to its second rank in total
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medal
numbers up to 1000 ones. Norway is
also
known for its top winner in Biathlon.
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but
the proportion of Italy in Olympic
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medals
is much fewer than other shown countries in the graph.
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to
sum up, all the shown areas have gained rewards
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but
the USA and USSR have the highest rank
specially
in swimming and
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Gymnastics
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IELTS academic Top medal winners of all time and medal won in all Olympics

Academic
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