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Time spent on leisure activities by men and women between the age of 21 and 40, in the US.

Time spent on leisure activities by men and women between the age of 21 and 40, in the US. 9w510
The pie chart shows the five free-time activities of people from 21 to 40 years old in hours per week in the US. Overall, the indoor activities, including watching TV, surfing on the internet, and other leisure at home, make up about two-thirds of the elective activities chosen, with 24. 8 hours a week. Spending time on TV and the Internet is the most popular activity, with appropriate half of men and women choosing this, followed by other leisure at home, at 8, 6 hours. The third most popular activity is socializing, at 4. 1 hours, followed by eating out, cinema and pubs accounting for 3. 3 hours. Finally, the least popular ones are sports and walking, with only 1. 1 hours.
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IELTS academic Time spent on leisure activities by men and women between the age of 21 and 40, in the US.

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