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This diagram illustrates how an Australian town collects rainwater for the purpose of drinking

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This diagram illustrates how an Australian town collects rainwater for the purpose of drinking. The rainwater is readily available for consumption once it has been passed through the cycle of filtration and water treatment. Whenever the rain falls on the slanted roof of the house it slides into the drain which in turn in connected to all the houses in a locality. The water from the drain is then passed into a water filter which gradually falls and sinks into the storage container. The water is settled in the said container until it is passed for the water treatment, which heavily uses chemicals for the treatment process. Once these processes are complete, water is available for drinking. When the tap is turned on it is directed upto through the pipes into the required houses,
This diagram illustrates how an Australian town collects rainwater for the purpose of drinking. The rainwater is
readily
available for consumption once it has
been passed
through the cycle of filtration and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
treatment.
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Whenever
the rain falls on the slanted roof of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
it slides into the drain which in turn in connected to all the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
in a locality. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
from the drain is then passed into a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
filter which
gradually
falls and sinks into the storage container. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
is settled
in the said container until it
is passed
for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
treatment, which
heavily
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uses
chemicals for the treatment process. Once these processes are complete,
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water
is available for drinking. When the tap
is turned
on it
is directed
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upto
through the pipes into the required
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houses
,
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IELTS academic This diagram illustrates how an Australian town collects rainwater for the purpose of drinking

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1 paragraphs
134 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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