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This bar graph shows the number of days lost due to injury per worker for three countries. There are three time periods shown beginning with the year 1991 and ending in 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information. You should write at least 150 words.

This bar graph shows the number of days lost due to injury per worker for three countries. There are three time periods shown beginning with the year 1991 and ending in 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information. BA9p
The bar graph shows number of days lost due to injury per worker in five different countries over a certain time period starting with 1991 and ending with 2005. From 1991 to 1995, China and Brazil lost 6 days which was the highest. The remaining three countries namely Germany, America, Korea lost nearly equal number of days that was around 3 days. Moving to next period of time that was from 1996 to 2000, China lost nearly 9 working days which was the highest. Following Brazil, America, Korea, Germany lost around 6, 3. 5, 3. 5, 3 days respectively. In the last period of time which was from 2001 to 2005, China was again the highest that lost 10 days followed by Brazil lost 7. 5 days. Both America and Brazil lost 5 days. Germany lost least days which were around 1. 5 in number. To conclude, China lost most working days in the given period of time. The country that lost least number of working days was Germany.
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due to injury per worker in five
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starting with 1991 and ending with 2005. From 1991 to 1995, China and Brazil
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6 days which was the highest. The remaining three countries
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of days that was around 3 days. Moving to
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that was from 1996 to 2000, China
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9 working days which was the highest. Following Brazil, America, Korea, Germany
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around 6, 3. 5, 3. 5, 3 days
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which was from 2001 to 2005, China was again the highest that
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10 days followed by Brazil
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7. 5 days. Both America and Brazil
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5 days. Germany
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, China
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most working days in the
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of working days was Germany.
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IELTS academic This bar graph shows the number of days lost due to injury per worker for three countries. There are three time periods shown beginning with the year 1991 and ending in 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.

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