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The first chart shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the iformation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the iformation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 6AV3
This task contains two piecharts. One of them demonstrates the using of energy in Australia for household purpose and another one indicates the emission of greenhouse gas for that purpose. According to the first figure, the energy are using mostly in heating purpose and that is 42%. The second most using sector is water heating purpose and that is 30%. And the energy using of refrigeration, cooling, lighting, other appliances are respectively 7, 2, 4 and 15%. In proportion to second chart, greenhouse gas mostly emitted from water heating purpose and that is 32%. And heating, cooling, lighting, refrigeration, other appliances are contributing to generate greenhouse gas respectively 15, 3, 8, 14, 28%. Although energy are most using heating purpose, that is shown in first figure. But water heating generates more greenhouse gas. Another comparison indicates at other appliances sector. On the basis of first figure, this sector consumed only 15% energy where it produce 28% greenhouse gas. That means consuming more energy is not indicate producing more greenhouse gas.
This task contains two
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piecharts
. One of them demonstrates the using of
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energy
in Australia for household
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purpose
and another one indicates the emission of
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greenhouse
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gas
for that purpose.

According to the
first
figure, the
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energy
are using
mostly
in
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heating
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purpose
and
that is
42%. The second most using sector is water
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heating
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purpose
and
that is
30%. And the
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energy
using of refrigeration, cooling, lighting, other appliances are
respectively
7, 2, 4 and 15%.

In proportion to second chart,
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greenhouse
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gas
mostly
emitted from water
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heating
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purpose
and
that is
32%. And
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heating
, cooling, lighting, refrigeration, other appliances are contributing to generate
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greenhouse
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gas
respectively
15, 3, 8, 14, 28%.

Although
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energy
are most using
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heating
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purpose
, that
is shown
in
first
figure.
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But
water
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heating
generates more
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greenhouse
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gas
. Another comparison indicates at other appliances sector. On the basis of
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figure, this sector consumed
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only
15%
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energy
where it
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produce
28%
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greenhouse
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gas
. That means consuming more
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energy
is not
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IELTS academic The first chart shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the iformation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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  American English
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170 words
6.0
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