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The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts in the upon indicates electricity developed in Germany and France. About all sources and renewable by 2009. Overall, when we take a look, we see both countries have some differentiates. There are ups and downs. Germany Electricity Generation, Conventional Thermal has 59. 6 % portion in all types in 2009. Renewables have 17. 4 % and Nuclear has 23. 0 % in respectively. When it comes to Renewables, we see Biomass has the most parts on this side. It is 39. 3 %. The following thing is Wind. İt is. 36. 9 %. And then, the third is Hydroelectric has 17. 7 %. Solar has 6. 1 %. Geothermal has no share in this section. And it is (560 Billion kWh) France Electricity Generation. All types have 3 main things. One of them is Nuclear, at the same time it has the most share. Then, Renewables is second place with 13. 7 %. Conventional Thermal has 10. 3 % and it has less portion. Well, Renewables have different portions of things as well. Such as Hydroelectric. It has got 80. 5 % part in this pie chart. The wind has 10. 5 %. Biomass has 8. 1 %. Solar has got 0. 9 % and lastly, Geoth has got no share in Renewables part of France. Total it is (510 Billion kWh)
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is. 36. 9 %. And then, the third is Hydroelectric has 17. 7 %. Solar has 6. 1 %. Geothermal has no share in this section. And it is (560 Billion kWh)

France Electricity Generation.

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