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These maps show the outskirts of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 2015. summeraize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where ewlevant.

These maps show the outskirts of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 2015. summeraize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where ewlevant. 0w9O5
These two maps illustrate the outskirts of Fosburg in 1980 and thirty-five years later in 2015. The city's changes mostly happened in the residential, commercial and, recreational fields. Se places in this town were as same as what they had been in 1980. The houses had been in the north of the city in 1980 stilled there in 2015 and also the hotel in the right hand of these houses didn't change. In contrast, a lot of changes happened during 35 years. For instance, the park had been replaced by Terraced houses and a new park had been built near this place. In addition, the grocer's shop and block of flats had been demolished and the roundabout was built. Furthermore, the new supermarket and two car parks added to this town and also a big field in the south in 1980 used to constructed Wore houses in 2015. Tennis courts had been knocked down and replaced by the sports center too. To sum up, during these thirty-five years this city had been facing with some alternation. These changes were not only about to construct new buildings but also included the number of relocating that happened in years between 1980 and 2015.
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in 1980 and thirty-five years later in 2015. The city's
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changes
mostly
happened in the residential, commercial and, recreational fields.

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houses
had been in the north of the city in 1980 stilled there in 2015 and
also
the hotel in the right hand of these
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houses
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change
.
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happened during 35 years.
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houses
and a new park had
been built
near this place.
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, the grocer's shop and block of flats had
been demolished
and the roundabout
was built
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, the new supermarket and two car parks
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to this town and
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big
field in the south in 1980
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houses
in 2015. Tennis courts had
been knocked
down and replaced by the sports center too.

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some
alternation. These
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were not
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about to construct new buildings
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included the number of relocating that happened in years between 1980 and 2015.
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IELTS academic These maps show the outskirts of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 2015. summeraize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where ewlevant.

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