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These maps give comparative data on the layout of a school in 2004 with a proposed site design after a couple of decades.

These maps give comparative data on the layout of a school in 2004 with a proposed site design after a couple of decades. yPkNr
It stands to reason that the major alteration for 2024 poses the addition of one more school building. The school will then be able to accommodate far more number of students. Regarding 2004, 600 students were attending the school and the two school buildings were set apart by a path running from the main entrance to the sports field. Till 2024, it is anticipated that pupils' number will reach 1000 and a third building will have been established. Furthermore, the objective is to join the two original buildings together, creating a shorter path which connects the buildings only. Since the third building and a second car park will be set up on the site of the headmost sports field, it calls for erecting a new, more compact sports field on the east. A new road will also be built from the main entrance towards the second parking lot. Eventually, no modifications will be made to the main entrance and original car park. (185)
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will then be able to accommodate far more number of students.

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and the two
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were set
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will have
been established
.
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, the objective is to
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join
the two original
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together, creating a shorter path which connects the
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buildings
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Since the third
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and a second car park will
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sports field, it calls for erecting a new, more compact sports field on the east. A new road will
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from the main entrance towards the second parking lot.
Eventually
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IELTS academic These maps give comparative data on the layout of a school in 2004 with a proposed site design after a couple of decades.

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