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These charts above show data about the purpose and travel destination of people from the UK who traveled abroad over the period of 1994 to 1998.

These charts above show data about the purpose and travel destination of people from the UK who traveled abroad over the period of 1994 to 1998. 11VY7
These charts above show data about the purpose and travel destination of people from the UK who traveled abroad over the period of 1994 to 1998. Overall, what can be noted from the data is that most of the time, the number of travelers showed upward trends except in 1995 when the figures were dropping slightly. Another thing is, Western Europe was the most favorite destination throughout the whole period. Looking into details, in 1994, the number of people who went abroad for vacation purposes reached the highest figure with a total of 15. 246 people. Bussines and visits to friends purposes were following with total numbers 3. 155 and 2. 689 respectively. Other purposes were the least with 982. Despite most of the numbers were declining in 1995, the number of people who went abroad for business purposes rose to 3. 188. Holiday, visit friends and other reasons figures dipped to 14. 898, 2. 628 and 896 respectively. In the next years until 1998, all of the numbers increased except for other purposes. Holiday purposes numbers, which is the highest amongst all, rocketed to 17. 896 in 1996, 19. 703 in 1997 and reached 20. 700 by 1998. Following this, Business purposes reached the second overall highest number with numbers 3. 249, 3. 639 and 3. 957 each year from 1996 respectively whereas visits to friend purposes were third with numbers 2. 774, 3. 051 and 3. 181. Other purposes numbers were the least from 1996 to 1998 period with 1. 030, 1. 054 and 990 respectively. In regards to the travel destination, Most people chose Western Europe as their travel destination in 1994 while North America and other areas following respectively. These rank would be the same until 1998. However, the numbers of people who chose Western Europe would have been soared over the whole period except in 1995 where it would have slightly dipped to just under 170. 000. The numbers who chose North America and other areas leveled off throughout the whole time with negligible increase in 1997 and 1998.
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from the UK
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traveled abroad over the period of 1994 to 1998.

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of travelers
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upward trends except in 1995 when the figures were dropping
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throughout the whole period.

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, in 1994, the
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went abroad for vacation
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reached the highest figure with a total of 15. 246
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friends
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were following with total
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3. 155 and 2. 689
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were the least with 982. Despite most of the
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were declining in 1995, the
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rose to 3. 188. Holiday, visit friends and
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reasons figures dipped to 14. 898, 2. 628 and 896
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increased
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. Holiday
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, which is the highest amongst all, rocketed to 17. 896 in 1996, 19. 703 in 1997 and reached 20. 700 by 1998. Following this, Business
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reached the second
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3. 249, 3. 639 and 3. 957 each year from 1996
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whereas visits to friend
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were third with
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2. 774, 3. 051 and 3. 181.
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were the least from 1996 to 1998 period with 1. 030, 1. 054 and 990
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, Most
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chose Western Europe as their travel
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in 1994 while North America and
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areas following
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chose North America and
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areas leveled off throughout the whole time with negligible increase in 1997 and 1998.
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