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The vertical bar graph illustrates the information regarding the proportion of women and men of different age groups who did physical exercises daily in Australia, in year 2010.

The vertical bar graph illustrates the information regarding the proportion of women and men of different age groups who did physical exercises daily in Australia, in year 2010. EqogD

It can be apparently seen that the percentage of males aged 15-24, engaged more in physical activities (52. 8%). Whereas, women did activity’s 5% less than men. Likewise, in adults field, females did above activism 6% than males. Moreover, individuals between aged 35 to 54 indicated that males did less physical activities approximately (10%), as compared with females. Moving further, the percentile of women was high 53%, in same way, the ratio of men had less like other age groups. In addition, the people who were grey hair same about in both genders which was 46. 7% and 47. 1%, respectively. Overall, it had been observed that the teenager males did more activities rather than, matured men. Whereas, the mature females did the highest activity’s while teenaged women.

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