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The two pie charts show the proportion of money spent on various household necessities in Malaysia and Japan in 2010. The date is calibrated in percentage.

The two pie charts show the proportion of money spent on various household necessities in Malaysia and Japan in 2010. The date is calibrated in percentage. gDoy3
Overall, the data indicates that in both cases food, housing and other goods and services were the main expenses while, both countries spent least on health care. It can be clearly seen from the chart, in Malaysia the greatest proportion of expenditure (34%) was on housing, while in Japan housing accounted for just 21% of the total. Followed by in Japan the greatest single expense was other goods and services at 29%, compared with 26% in Malaysia. Moreover, food came at second place in Japan, at 24%, while in Malaysia the actual proportion was higher (27%). In Japan another major expense was transport, at 20%, but this was much lower in Malaysia (10%). Surprisingly, in both countries the smallest percentage of expenditure was on health care. NOTE: The coherence and cohesion of your answer are also assessed in writing task 1. There fore, in IELTS writing task 1 answers you need to organize your writing.
Overall
, the data indicates that in both cases food, housing and other
goods
and services were the main expenses while, both countries spent
least
on health care.

It can be
clearly
seen
from the chart, in Malaysia the greatest proportion of expenditure (34%) was on housing, while in
Japan
housing accounted for
just
21% of the total. Followed by in
Japan
the greatest single expense was other
goods
and services at 29%, compared with 26% in Malaysia.

Moreover
, food came at second place in
Japan
, at 24%, while in Malaysia the actual proportion was higher (27%). In
Japan
another major expense was transport, at 20%,
but
this was much lower in Malaysia (10%).
Surprisingly
, in both countries the smallest percentage of expenditure was on health care.

NOTE: The coherence and cohesion of your answer are
also
assessed in writing task 1.
There fore
, in IELTS writing task 1 answers you need to organize your writing.
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IELTS academic The two pie charts show the proportion of money spent on various household necessities in Malaysia and Japan in 2010. The date is calibrated in percentage.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
155 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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