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The two pie charts below show employment patterns in great Britain in 1992

The two pie charts below show employment patterns in great Britain in 1992 KN9N

The two pie charts provide information on the proportion of males and females in six distinct employment categories, divided into manual and non manual designations; in the United Kingdom, in 1992. Overall, it is explicated that the contribution to clerical or related work was highest among women, while manual more contributed towards managerial and professional segment. In general, greater ratio of women work in non-manual occupations then work in manual occupations. In manual employment, the striking difference in both sexes was witnessed in craft or similar workers, where females were comprised of Mary 3% with comparison to males, at 24%. A negligible difference of 1% was accounted with respect to general laborers and other manual workers respectively. Furthermore, in non-manual category, 31% of women choice clerical work or related. This figure was fivefold to the percentage of men in the same field. In contrast, managerial and professional career was comprised of 6 % more than the opposite sex.

The two pie charts provide information on the proportion of males and females in six distinct employment categories, divided into manual and It appears that a hyphen is missing.non-manual
non manual
 designations; in the United Kingdom, in 1992.

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, it is explicated
 that the contribution to clerical or related You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtaskindustrytrialjobproductionstruggle
work
 was highest among women, while manual more contributed towards managerial and professional segment. In general
, greater ratio of women Possible agreement error. Did you mean "works"? (Some collective nouns can be treated as both singular and plural, so 'work' is not always incorrect.)works
work
 in non-manual occupations then You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtaskindustrytrialjobproductionstruggle
work
 in manual occupations.

In manual employment, the striking difference in both sexes was witnessed
 in craft or similar workers, where females Did you mean "comprised" or "were composed of"?comprisedwere composed of
were comprised of
 Mary 3% with comparison to males, at 24%. A negligible difference of 1% was accounted
 with respect to general laborers and other manual workers respectively
.

Furthermore
, in non-manual category, 31% of women choice clerical You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtaskindustrytrialjobproductionstruggle
work
 or related. This figure was fivefold to the percentage of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsresidentscitizens
men
 in the same field. In contrast
, managerial and professional career Did you mean "comprised" or "consisted of" or "was composed of"?comprisedconsisted ofwas composed of
was comprised of
 6 % more than the opposite sex. 