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The two pie charts below illutrate the information about the percentage of five different kinds of energy natural energy produced in France in 1995 and 2005.

The two pie charts below illutrate the information about the percentage of five different kinds of energy natural energy produced in France in 1995 and 2005. BLxo5
The two pie charts below illustrate the information about the percentage of five different kinds of energy natural energy produced in France in 1995 and 2005. In particular, it is noticeable that the proportion of coal energy was the highest in 1995 and 2005, on the contrary for nuclear power in the two same years, accounted for at least the amount of energy in France, except for other energy productions. In 1995, the proportion of energy produced by coal was the highest of 29. 80% in total energy given in the pie chart. It seemed to not change much in the next decade and slightly increased to 30. 93% in 2005. On the other hand, the ratio of gas between 1995 and 2005 was the second energy produced behind coal and still stayed high, as follows 29. 63% and 30. 31% respectively. In term of fuel, petro produced accounted for 29. 27% and there was a significant decrease of 19. 55% in the number of energy production from 1995 to 2005. This figure for nuclear power was the lowest, at 6. 40% and started to rise moderately to 10. 10% over the period of time.
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was the highest in 1995 and 2005,
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in France,
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productions.

In 1995, the proportion of
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by coal was the highest of 29. 80% in total
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much in the
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increased to 30. 93% in 2005.
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behind coal and
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petro
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accounted for 29. 27% and there was a significant decrease of 19. 55% in the number of
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production from 1995 to 2005. This figure for nuclear power was the lowest, at 6. 40% and
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IELTS academic The two pie charts below illutrate the information about the percentage of five different kinds of energy natural energy produced in France in 1995 and 2005.

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