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The two maps describe the main changes which have taken place in the town of Kimsville between the year 2000 and today .

The two maps describe the main changes which have taken place in the town of Kimsville between the year 2000 and today. In general, it appears that Kimsville has become modernized, with a lot more buildings and a range of entertainment. One interesting change is that the old factory has been converted into a software company to reduce toxic gases and increase safety for the people. The shopping still there and didn’t change anything. The southwest of the city used to be a green area, with lots of trees, but the trees have been cut down and replaced by new apartments and football stadium. In the west, a new train station has been built; this has made it much easier to get to the city center. A final change is the old cinema has been knocked down to make way for a new pub, so the residents can relax after a hardworking day.
The two maps
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which have taken place in the town of
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Kimsville
between the year 2000 and
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today
.

In general
, it appears that
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Kimsville
has become modernized, with a lot more buildings and a range of entertainment.

One interesting
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change
is that the
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old
factory has
been converted
into a software
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company
to
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reduce
toxic gases and increase safety for the
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people
. The shopping
still
there and didn’t
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change
anything. The southwest of the city
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used
to be a green area, with lots of trees,
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but
the trees have been
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cut
down and replaced by new apartments and football stadium.

In the west, a new train station has
been built
; this has made it much easier to
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get
to the city center. A final
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change
is the
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old
cinema has
been knocked
down to
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make
way for a new pub,
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so
the residents can relax after a hardworking day.

IELTS academic The two maps describe the main changes which have taken place in the town of Kimsville between the year 2000 and today.

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4 paragraphs
153 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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