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The two maps describe the changes of a health center in 2005 and present. Summarize the key points and make comparison where necessary

The two maps describe the changes of a health center in 2005 and present. Summarize the key points and make comparison where necessary Llwp8
The two maps illustrate the changes in a health center’s infrastructure building structure in the present day compared to 2005. Overall, the center has expanded noticeably in size, in addition to being restructured. First, the maps show that a new room called Minor operations room, has been constructed on the upper left corner of the building. A new CR room consulting room has also been built, raising the number of CR to four rooms. Last but not least, there is a new children’s play area in the bottom left corner of the building, in close proximity to the reception desk. The parking lot has enlarged in size by 18 spaces, thus narrowing the garden. It is noteworthy that the entrance has been relocated, moving from the bottom of the map to its bottom left-hand corner, adjacent to the office. Neither the physiotherapy room nor the office experienced any significant changes during the period.
The two maps illustrate the
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changes
in a health center’s infrastructure building structure in the present day compared to 2005.

Overall
, the center has expanded
noticeably
in size,
in addition
to
being restructured
.

First
, the maps
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show
that a new
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room
called Minor operations
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room
, has
been constructed
on the upper
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left
corner of the building. A new CR
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room
consulting
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room
has
also
been built
, raising the number of CR to four
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rooms
. Last
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but
not least, there is a new children’s play area in the bottom
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left
corner of the building, in
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close proximity
to the reception desk.

The parking lot has enlarged in size by 18 spaces,
thus
narrowing the garden. It is noteworthy that the entrance has
been relocated
, moving from the bottom of the map to its bottom
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left
-hand corner, adjacent to the office. Neither the physiotherapy
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room
nor the office experienced any significant
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changes
during the period.

IELTS academic The two maps describe the changes of a health center in 2005 and present. Summarize the key points and make comparison where necessary

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