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The two maps below show the town of Barmouth before and after proposed new changes to stop cars entering the old town.

The two maps below show the town of Barmouth before and after proposed new changes to stop cars entering the old town. ENjYr
The provided two maps display the development of the suburb of Barmouth in the favor of prohibition of entering the car in the old area of ​​the town. Overall, there can be shown several changes in map - 2 as compare to vintage such as addition of car parking areas, padistrian footpath, bridges for crossing river and supermarket however the noticable improvement is that entrances of the town dornot allow vehicles inside. First of all, there are two areas reserved for parking facelities for cars near by entry gates of the main area and these are specificaly located Do not write below this line in two different parts (first one is in the east and second one is in the west). Moreover, both parkings are indevidually joint with flyovers which is placed on the river tweed and also they are usefull for leaving, village area via main koads. One bridge has already existed on the south west corner and the other one is constructed in the opposite side. Consequently, the town area seems nerrower than past because main road convert in walkway and this walk way full with the cafes and restaurants. The last change is that there is a supermarket near by river and at the south east part but it is quite far from village.
The provided two maps display the development of the suburb of
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Barmouth
in the favor of prohibition of entering the car in the
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old
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area
of ​​the town.

Overall
, there can
be shown
several
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changes
in map
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-
2 as compare to vintage such as addition of car parking
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areas
,
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padistrian
footpath, bridges for crossing river and supermarket
however
the
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noticable
improvement is that entrances of the town
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dornot
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allow
vehicles inside.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, there are two
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areas
reserved for parking
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facelities
for cars
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near by
entry gates of the main
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area
and these are
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specificaly
located Do not write below this line in two
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different
parts (
first
one is in the east and second one is in the west).
Moreover
, both
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parkings
are
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indevidually
joint with flyovers which
is placed
on the river tweed and
also
they are
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usefull
for leaving, village
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area
via main
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koads
. One bridge has already existed on the
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south west
corner and the other one
is constructed
in the opposite side.

Consequently
, the town
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area
seems
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nerrower
than past
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because
main road convert in walkway and this walk way
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full with
the
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cafes
and restaurants. The last
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change
is that there is a supermarket
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near by
river and at the
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south east
part
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but
it is quite far from village.

IELTS academic The two maps below show the town of Barmouth before and after proposed new changes to stop cars entering the old town.

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