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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010

The two maps illustrate some changes in the way people accessed a city hospital in two different years, 2007 and 2010. It is clear that the main differences in road access to this hospital involve intersection upgrades and the development of parking spaces and bus facilities. From 2007 to 2010, the most striking change is the appearance of two new roundabouts. The first one was constructed at the three-way junction of the hospital road and the ring road surrounding the hospital, while the second one was located at the four-way intersection of the hospital road and the city road. Looking at the other features, we can see that the six bus stops, situated along the hospital road, were removed to make way for a new bus station to the western side of this road. In terms of parking spaces, a new public car park was constructed to the eastern side of the hospital and people could access this car park via the ring road, while the old parking lot became a staff-only area.
The two maps illustrate
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years, 2007 and 2010.

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that the main differences in
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access to this
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involve intersection upgrades and the development of parking spaces and bus facilities.

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change
is the appearance of two new roundabouts. The
first
one
was constructed
at the three-way junction of the
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hospital
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road
and the ring
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road
surrounding the
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hospital
, while the second one
was located
at the four-way intersection of the
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hospital
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and the city road.

Looking at the other features, we can
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that the six bus
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stops
, situated along the
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hospital
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road
,
were removed
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make
way for a new bus station to the western side of this
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road
. In terms of parking spaces, a new public car park
was constructed
to the eastern side of the
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hospital
and
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could access this car park via the ring
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road
, while the
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parking lot became a staff-
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IELTS academic The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010

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