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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010 qwJp
The two presented maps describe the changes that took place at a city hospital from 2007 to 2010. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the largest changes involved transportation, including additional public parking, the construction of a nearby bus station and new roundabouts. The majority of the hospital underwent very little change. The roads (Ring, City, and Hospital road) all remained largely the same, though two small lanes were built off of hospital road to link up with the new bus station and roundabouts on either end of Hospital road (where it bisects with Ring and City road) were added. The city hospital building itself was unaltered. The changes were mainly around the hospital and the largest of these was related to parking. In 2007, there was a small parking lot along Hospital road for both staff and the public. By 2010 they had decided to separate the public and staff parking by adding an exclusively public parking area running along the east side of the city hospital.
The two presented maps
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describe
the
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changes
that took place at a city
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hospital
from 2007 to 2010. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is
readily
apparent that the largest
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changes
involved transportation, including additional
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public
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parking
, the construction of a nearby bus station and new roundabouts.

The majority of the
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hospital
underwent
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very
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little
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change
. The
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roads
(Ring, City, and
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Hospital
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road)
all remained
largely
the same, though two
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small
lanes
were built
off of
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hospital
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road
to link up with the new bus station and roundabouts on either
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end
of
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Hospital
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road
(where it bisects with Ring and City
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road)
were
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added
.
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The
city
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hospital
building itself
was unaltered
.

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The
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changes
were
mainly
around the
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hospital
and the largest of these
was related
to
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parking
. In 2007, there was a
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small
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parking
lot along
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Hospital
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road
for both staff and the
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public
. By 2010 they had decided to separate the
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public
and staff
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parking
by adding an exclusively
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public
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parking
area running along the east side of the city
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hospital
.
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IELTS academic The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010

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172 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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