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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant?

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. OxWy
The transformation of several tourist amenities construction in a particular island is revealed in the given maps. It is worth noting that maps presents significant changes and there are numerous new additional buildings. To begin with, the area of this island is somewhere in the vicinity of 1000 metres square and there is no buildings in the earliest time, just a few palm trees. It is surrounded by sea and have a beach with the footpath in the west side area. Moving into another details, in the latest time, the number of tourist facilities is manufactured in all parts of the areas but it seems rarely in the east. There are plentiful of home stay surroundings while restaurant and reception space take place in between. Nowadays show a new regulation of swimming allowance close to the beach. It started in these days, several boats and the pier are emerged as well as the vehicle track which connected to the reception and restaurant.
The transformation of several tourist
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "amenities'" or "amenity's"?
amenities
construction
The usual preposition for "island" is "on" not "in". Revise: "on a particular island".
in a particular island
is revealed
in the
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given
maps. It is worth noting that maps presents significant
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changes
and there are numerous new additional buildings.

To
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begin
with, the area of this island is somewhere in the vicinity of 1000
Possible spelling mistake. 'metres' is British English.
metres
square and
Did you mean "there are no buildings"?
there is no buildings
in the earliest time,
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just
a few palm trees. It
is surrounded
by sea and have a beach with the footpath in the west side area.

Moving into another
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details
, in the latest time, the number of tourist facilities
is manufactured
in all parts of the areas
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it
The adverb 'rarely' is usually put before the verb 'seems'.
seems rarely
in the east. There are plentiful of home stay surroundings while restaurant and reception space take place in between. Nowadays
Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: "shows".
show
a new regulation of swimming allowance close to the beach. It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
in these days, several boats and the pier
are emerged
as well
as the vehicle
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
track
which connected to the reception and restaurant.

IELTS academic The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
162 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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