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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004.

The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. 7aEOX
The two illustration below gives information about New Zealand import graphs from Australia an Japan. Information is divided into years 1994 to 2004 and units are in million. Overall, most of the time imports from Autralia staying in higher bands respecto imports from Japan. Both graph are fluctuating and at the end of the period Australia's import numbers reaching most satisfying numbers. In terms of provided imports to Australia starting of from just under 4000 million point in year 1994, after that gradually increasing up to around 6400 million in 1996 just before falling dramatically to 3000 million in year 1999. However from now on graph fluctuated and reached the peak point at the end of the period, which is about 8000 million and in 2004 year. On the other hand, japan's grap from very beggining to year 1997 rising to point about 6200 million which is own peak. Although, declined at 1999 to just above 4000 million, also before hitting low point at the end of the period climbing up to 6000 million in 2000s then finishing period with lowest import rate around 2000 million.
The two illustration below gives information about New Zealand
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graphs from Australia
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Japan. Information
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from Japan. Both graph
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Australia's
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numbers reaching most satisfying numbers.

In terms of provided
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to Australia starting of from
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under 4000
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in
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1994, after that
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million
in 1996
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1999.
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and in 2004 year.

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1997 rising to
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about 6200
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peak. Although, declined at 1999 to
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climbing up to 6000
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