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The two layout illustrate the information about changes had been done in Museum within 10 years of period.

The two layout illustrate the information about changes had been done in Museum within 10 years of period. 2bPyJ
The two layout illustrate the information about changes had been done in Museum within 10 years of period. It can be seen that several changes were made between 1998 and 2000. Firstly, in 1998, the shape of museum was rectangular with garden at centre. Additionally, there were two permanent exhibition rooms at eastern side and western side of museum also, cafe was located at northern direction of garden. The tickets and entrance/exit zone was situated at southern side of garden. Moreover there was one temporary exhibition room was constructed at south west corner and shop, water closet and bags and coats area were made at south west corner. Secondly, many changes had been done in 2008 such as shop water closet and bag and coats area were replaced with permanent exhibition room. Whereas, bags, coats and shops had been constructed at southern eastern direction. in addition, western side permanent exhibition room had been replaced with restaurant at northern side and temporary exhibition room at western side. Furthermore, cafe area was cut down for water closet while garden area was cut down for cafe sitting area and fountains. Overall in 2008, museum had more facility with restaurant cafe sitting area fountain as compared to 1998.
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changes
had
been done
in
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Museum
within 10 years of period. It can be
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seen
that several
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changes
were made
between 1998 and 2000.

Firstly
, in 1998, the shape of
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museum
was rectangular with
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garden
at
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centre
.
Additionally
, there were two permanent exhibition
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rooms
at eastern side and western side of
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museum
also
,
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cafe
was located
at northern direction of
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garden
. The tickets and entrance/exit zone
was situated
at southern side of
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garden
.
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Moreover
there was one temporary exhibition
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room
was constructed
at
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south west
corner and shop, water closet and bags and coats
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area
were made
at
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south west
corner.

Secondly
,
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many
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changes
had
been done
in 2008 such as shop water closet and bag and coats
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area
were replaced
with permanent exhibition
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room
. Whereas, bags, coats and shops had
been constructed
at southern eastern direction.
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in
addition, western side permanent exhibition
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room
had
been replaced
with restaurant at northern side and temporary exhibition
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room
at western side.
Furthermore
,
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cafe
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area
was
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cut
down for water closet while
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garden
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area
was
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cut
down for
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cafe
sitting
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area
and fountains.

Overall
in 2008,
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museum
had more facility with restaurant
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cafe
sitting
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area
fountain as compared to 1998.
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IELTS academic The two layout illustrate the information about changes had been done in Museum within 10 years of period.

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