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The two graphs give information about the trend of Japan’s citizens and the proportion of the people who were 65 years old above.

The two graphs give information about the trend of Japan’s citizens and the proportion of the people who were 65 years old above. o5GnV
The two graphs give information about the trend of Japan’s citizens and the proportion of the people who were 65 years old above. Overall, it can be seen from the two graphs that while the trend of population has been predicted to decrease in the future, the rate of people aged 65 or above has been estimated to increase in that same period. In terms of population’s trend, 84. 1 million people were recorded in 1950. This figure gradually climbed to 126. 9 million people in 2000. Japan’s citizens hit the highest point at 127. 8 million in 2005 before it will be predicted to be 110 million in 2035. This figure will drop to 89. 9 million in 2055. The number of elder people who were 65 years or over was 4. 1 million in 1950, accounting for 4. 9 % of total population. There was an enormous increase in the number of people aged 65 over from 1950 to 2005, from 4. 1 million to 25. 7 million. This led to a significant climb in the proportion of people in the total population aged 65 years old or over in the given period, from 4. 9% to 20. 0%. The number of people who fall in 65 years or above will be foreseen in 2035 and 2055, being 37. 2 million and 36. 5 million respectively. As a result, the ratio of individuals of total citizens aged 65 or over will grow to 34. 0% and 41. 0% respectively.
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people
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In terms of
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population’s
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climbed to 126. 9
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million
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in 2000. Japan’s citizens hit the highest point at 127. 8
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million
in 2005
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before
it will
be predicted
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in 2035. This figure will drop to 89. 9
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in 2055.

The number of elder
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was 4. 1
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million
in 1950, accounting for 4. 9 % of total
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population
. There was an enormous increase in the number of
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people
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aged
65
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from 1950 to 2005, from 4. 1
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to 25. 7
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. This led to a significant climb in the proportion of
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population
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65 years
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period, from 4. 9% to 20. 0%. The number of
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who fall in 65 years or above will be foreseen in 2035 and 2055, being 37. 2
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and 36. 5
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As a result
, the ratio of individuals of total citizens
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aged
65 or
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will grow to 34. 0% and 41. 0%
respectively
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IELTS academic The two graphs give information about the trend of Japan’s citizens and the proportion of the people who were 65 years old above.

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