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The two charts illustrate number of the destinations of graduate and postgraduate students from the UK in the year 2008 who do not have full time work after leaving college.

The two charts illustrate number of the destinations of graduate and postgraduate students from the UK in the year 2008 who do not have full time work after leaving college. Og3nj

The two charts illustrate number of the destinations of graduate and postgraduate students from the UK in the year 2008 who do not have full time work after leaving college. The first chart clearly shows the graduate students who were doing further study has the biggest one in numbers of 29, 665, whereas who are involving in part time work and unemployment they have the moderate numbers of 17, 735 and 16, 235 respectively. On the other hand voluntary work students found the least one of 3500. However, in the second chart it provides the information that postgraduate students who are having further study were the largest one of 2, 725 followed by part time work students of 2, 535 in number while, unemployment was the less significant of 1, 625 and voluntary work students was the least one of 345 in number. Overall, UK graduates who are doing further study has the highest number in the year 2008. They are not doing any full time work. Whereas, the students who are involving in voluntary work are the least one. On the other hand in case of postgraduates the same sectors has same positions respectively but less in numbers.

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