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The three pie charts illutrate water consumption for three various sectors including residential, industry and agriculture in San Diego, California and the world as a whole.

The three pie charts illutrate water consumption for three various sectors including residential, industry and agriculture in San Diego, California and the world as a whole. B7RbX
The three pie charts illutrate water consumption for three various sectors including residential, industry and agriculture in San Diego, California and the world as a whole. Overall, water use for households accounts for the highest proportion. Meanwhile, agriculture used the vast majority of water consumed in the world. In San Diego and California, the amount of water consumed for residential areas constitutes around 60% and 39% respectively, compared with only 8% for this sector worldwide. The opposite trend can be seen in water consumption for agriculture which consumes around 69% global water use, whereas the figures for San Diego and California are significant lower with only 17% and 28%, respectively. Turning to the remaining sector, the amount of water used for industry in San Diego and the world is the same, at 23%; while the figure for California is minimally higher, at 33%.
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consumption for three various sectors including residential, industry and agriculture in San Diego, California and the world as a whole.

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for households accounts for the highest proportion. Meanwhile, agriculture
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the vast majority of
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consumed in the world.

In San Diego and California, the amount of
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consumed for residential areas constitutes around 60% and 39%
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only
8% for this sector worldwide. The opposite trend can be
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consumption for agriculture which consumes around 69% global
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, whereas the figures for San Diego and California are significant lower with
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17% and 28%,
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Turning to the remaining sector, the amount of
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for industry in San Diego and the world is the same, at 23%; while the figure for California is
minimally
higher, at 33%.
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IELTS academic The three pie charts illutrate water consumption for three various sectors including residential, industry and agriculture in San Diego, California and the world as a whole.

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