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The tabular illustration reveals the comparison amongst traveller who gave preference to bus for visiting destination in United Kingdom from2009to 2011.

The tabular illustration reveals the comparison amongst traveller who gave preference to bus for visiting destination in United Kingdom from2009to 2011. BYewm
The tabular illustration reveals the comparison amongst traveller who gave preference to bus for visiting destination in United Kingdom from2009to 2011. In general, bus had been preferred by maximum percentage of people to shop things as compared to other purposes. To specify, in2009, 65percent traveller used bus for shopping followed by 2010, 2011 with 56, 51percent respectively. Whereas, for reaching on study destination, similarly was observed in percentage of people in 2010, 2011. while only 4percent individuals used bus in 2009. However, the minimum proportion of people traveled by bus comprisesd for 3to go on work Places in give three years. Strolling forth, there was small difference was noticed among people who visited friends and percentage of day tour with 12 in 2009, 2010. Bus had been preferred by 19 percent people for visiting friends whereas 12percent day tour was seen in 2010. The proportion of people was double in 2011who visited friends than day tour. Sukhjeet kaur
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to shop things as compared to other purposes.

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65percent
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traveller
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used
bus for shopping followed by 2010, 2011 with 56,
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51percent
respectively
. Whereas, for reaching on study destination,
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people
in 2010, 2011.
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bus in 2009.
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, the minimum proportion of
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traveled by bus
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comprisesd
for 3to go on work Places in give three years.

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difference
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who visited friends and percentage of day tour with 12 in 2009, 2010. Bus had
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by 19
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percent
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people
for visiting friends whereas
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day tour was
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seen
in 2010. The proportion of
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people
was double in 2011who visited friends than day tour.

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