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The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufacturers in the years 2005 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufacturers in the years 2005 and 2006. 8YBV
The table compares the market share of the leading mobile phone producers in the world in 2005 and 2006. At first glance, in 2005 and 2006, the proportion for Nokia was the highest among the other companies at 32, 5% and 35% respectively. The other competitor was true for Motorola, which accounted for 17, 7% in 2005 and then it rose slightly to 21, 1% in 2006, stayed at the second place only after Nokia. The rising of market share was seen by Sony Ericsson, which had a more modest increase from 6, 3% to 7, 4% in these two years. In contrast, the market share of Samsung made up for 12, 7% in 2005 before going down sìgnificantly to 11, 8% in 2006, whereas, the sales of LG dropped more slightly from 6, 7% to 6, 3% in these two years. Likewise, BenQ Mobile saw a substantially decline to half of its rate within 1 year, from 4, 9% in 2005 to 2, 4% in 2006. Finally, there was a fall in the market share of other phone companies, which accounted for 19, 2% of the market in 2005 and immediately fell to 16, 2% in 2006. Overall, it reveals that Nokia, Motorola and Sony Ericsson developed their market share, especially, Nokia held a largest market share of the global market in both years while most of the companies witnessed a fall of the market share.
The table compares the
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of the leading mobile phone producers in the world in 2005 and 2006.

At
first
glance, in 2005 and 2006, the proportion for Nokia was the highest among the other
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companies
at 32, 5% and 35%
respectively
. The other competitor was true for Motorola, which accounted for 17, 7% in 2005 and then it rose
slightly
to 21, 1% in 2006, stayed at the second place
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only
after Nokia. The rising of
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was
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seen
by Sony Ericsson, which had a more modest increase from 6, 3% to 7, 4% in these two years.

In contrast
, the
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of Samsung made up for 12, 7% in 2005
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before
going down sì
gnificantly
to 11, 8% in 2006, whereas, the sales of LG dropped more
slightly
from 6, 7% to 6, 3% in these two years.
Likewise
,
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Mobile
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to half of its rate within 1 year, from 4, 9% in 2005 to 2, 4% in 2006.
Finally
, there was a fall in the
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of other phone
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companies
, which accounted for 19, 2% of the
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in 2005 and immediately fell to 16, 2% in 2006.

Overall
, it reveals that Nokia, Motorola and Sony Ericsson developed their
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,
especially
, Nokia held
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a
largest
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of the global
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market
in both years while most of the
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companies
witnessed a fall of the
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.
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IELTS academic The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufacturers in the years 2005 and 2006.

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