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The table shows the television viewing figures for sports by country in millions

The table shows the television viewing figures for sports by country in millions 5ArMN
The given data provides the amount of people who watched on the television in four different countries in terms of four different kinds of sports namely Tennis, Golf, Motor Racing and AthleticsIn general, it can be seen clearly that golf and tennis are the most watched in terms of the total viewship. In addition more UK and USA citizens paid attention to sports than people in the two remaining nation. It can be seen that UK and USA which are had the most viewers watched tennis. The citizens of Australia and Canada just spent more than 6 on Tennis. USA is a country had most of viewers watched golf, while people of UK spent just 2, 8. The citizens of UK paid attention to Motor Racing, was 6 times as much as that USA and Canada. On the other hand, the viewers of Athletics stood at 5, 5 in USA, while people of Australia spent just 3
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tennis. The citizens of Australia and Canada
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spent more than 6 on Tennis. USA is a country had
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2, 8. The citizens of UK paid attention to Motor Racing, was 6 times as much as that USA and Canada.
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